Bright Lights Of The City

[BrokenHeartsRMe]

Chorus:
The bright lights of the city
Are telling me to run, run, run
I'm drowning in self pity
What have I become (run, run)
Run

I fell in love, far too young
We didn't need, anyone
I told myself, I knew it all
But for every rise, there has to be a fall

I divorced the truth, to fit the lie
Gave it all, to the wrong guy
I told myself, that I knew best
But looking back, I was wrong I guess

Chorus:
The bright lights of the city
Are telling me to run, run, run
I'm drowning in self pity
What have I become (run, run)
Run

I was told, to use my head
Followed my, heart instead
Thought that he, would love me well
Now I'm trapped, in a living hell

Chorus:
The bright lights of the city
Are telling me to run, run, run
I'm drowning in self pity
What have I become (run, run)
Run

Sitting here in the middle of nowhere
Lost everything I ever had
All I see are the bright lights of the city
One reason not to be sad

Chorus:
The bright lights of the city
Are telling me to run, run, run
I'm drowning in self pity
What have I become (run, run)
Run

I'm gonna run
I'm gonna run, run, run
Run

[Mr Mint]

If you are going to use "bright lights of the city" as your hook, you may want to consider adding it a few more times to your chorus, like the following:

Chorus:
The bright lights of the city
Are telling me to run, run, run
I'm drowning in self pity
In the bright lights of the city
What have I become?
In the bright lights of the city
They're telling me to run
The bright lights of the city

[BrokenHeartsRMe]

Thanks for the feedback. Nice to know someone bothers to comment lol I've taken on board the suggestions and rewritten the song to try and explain the title a little better.
I fell in love, far too young
We didn't need, anyone
I told myself, I knew it all
But for every rise, there has to be a fall

I divorced the truth, to fit the lie
Gave it all, to the wrong guy
I told myself, that I knew best
But looking back, I was wrong I guess

Chorus:
Now I'm looking to the bright lights of the city
I'm feeling low but the glow is so pretty
Now I'm heading for the bright lights of the city
The city
I'll leave behind this self-pity

I was told, to use my head
Followed my, heart instead
Thought that he, would love me well
Now I'm trapped, in a living hell

Chorus

Sitting here in the middle of nowhere
Lost everything I ever had
All I see are the bright lights of the city
One reason not to be sad

Chorus x2

[Sparks Fly]

your rhyme is so simple yet so effective. when reading through this i could really get a senseof the rhythm. what genre are you thinking? i could see this being up beat but not too complex.
i really liked how you have re worked your chorus i think that including the hook more was a good idea.

[siresongz]

The song is great. i really like the first verse and the words "self pity." do you mind if use this in one of my songs as it is truly inspiring. the title is great and i love the lyrics. good luck for next song x please check out my songs aswell x

[Mr Mint]

Good job with the re-write.

[TheLaLaBananas]

This is probably one of my favorite on this website so far. Probably because it's close to my writing style The chorus is AWESOME! Wish I could hear music to this.

[aspirations]

I divorced the truth, to fit the lie
Gave it all, to the wrong guy
I told myself, that I knew best
But looking back, I was wrong I guess

I loved that, the song is very relateable: feeling sad but finding something that gives you release. good job=]

[jodyWayne]

I like it. It riminds me of some sixties songs.

good job,
jodyWayne